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Haiku – Unfinished

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AWR72

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Thunder and lightning

Nature’s electrical dance

Those are the first two lines. Now, I need some help figuring out how to close this Haiku. I like all three of these lines, but I’m not sure what best fits it.

Here are the lines.

A. Takes two to tango

B. Across tonight’s sky

C. Across the night sky

Any thoughts as to which one is your favorite? Can you think of another line to close it with?

I’m leaning more towards A. myself.

Comments

4 responses to “Haiku – Unfinished”

  1. bfffg Avatar
    bfffg

    C feels like a more “traditional” ending, but A seems to tie the concept up a little better (and is humorous), in my humble opinion.

    1. atothewr Avatar
      atothewr

      I can see both of those. I never thought about the humor aspect of it.

  2. Paul F. Lenzi Avatar
    Paul F. Lenzi

    I’m with you on A

    1. atothewr Avatar
      atothewr

      That was my first thought when I was watching the storm last night.

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